1988. Choose a distinguished novel or play in which some of the most significant events are mental or psychological; for example, awakenings, discoveries, changes in consciousness. In a well-organized essay, describe how the author manages to give these internal events the sense of excitement, suspense, and climax usually associated with external action. Do not merely summarize the plot.
Just like on an episode of Criminal Minds, some people are not as mentally sane as others. In Shakespeare’s Macbeth the main events are psychological; full of personal discoveries, changes in sanity, and the truth within ones self. Macbeth and his wife’s mental states cause the deaths of the people around them and of their eventual downfall at the climax of the play.
In some of the first scenes of the play by William Shakespeare, three witches show up and confront Macbeth giving him the prophecy and awakening his and Lady Macbeth’s desire for power. When Macbeth first hears that he is thane of Cawdor and will one day become king, he does not believe it. A short while later, a messenger comes and informs him that he is indeed thane of Cawdor and Macbeth assumes that he will become king one day as well. When Macbeth just assumes that he will become king one day, the suspense kicks in. How will he become king? When will he become king? These questions are meant to build in the reader’s head causing excitement. Lady Macbeth is startled by the prophecy and with her lust of power awakened, wishes to push up the date of which her husband will be crowned. At one point, Lady Macbeth actually wills away her womanhood to become more manly, or harsher and capable of murder. She’s driving herself insane thinking about and planning to commit a murder in cold blood. This act would have not been culturally accepted in that day and era and therefore would have caused great excitement in the audience at the anomaly before them.
Towards the end of the play, both Macbeth and Lady Macbeth are obviously insane. They have killed off King Duncan, Macduff’s wife and child, and even Banquo all in an attempt to gain and keep their power. It is destroying their sanity and helps create the climax of the story. If Macduff hadn’t had his family murdered, he would mostly likely not be so intent upon killing Macbeth during the final battle and climax of the play. An exciting sword fight ensued before Macbeth finally fell by Macduff’s sword. Lady Macbeth, who actually killed Duncan, is torn apart by her actions and asks “will these hands ere be clean?” as if there was still the blood of her victims on them. Her obvious insanity creates an exciting and intriguing portion to the story, adding to the sense that Macbeth has also slowly been losing his marbles.
As everyone who survived the play on Dunsinane Castle head to Scone for the crowning of Kind Malcolm, we are left to ponder Macbeth’s legacy. The man and his wife clearly went insane and their lack of sanity certainly created the plot, excitement, climax and suspense within the play. Without the married couples’ insanity, the deaths of most people (including themselves) could have been avoided along with their downfall.
Great analysis. I really like how you're able to add a quote into your third paragraph, though not expected, adding a quote into a closed prompt essay really shows me (the reader) that you've got a firm grasp on the material. You do a great job of keeping the summary of the plot to a minimum and only focusing on the key aspects that relate to your thesis. You've also got great topic and conclusion sentences that each thoroughly encompass the core of your thesis
ReplyDeleteThe most important thing that i noticed: you never answer the prompt. It is asking for examples of the author makes psychological events seem suspenseful and exciting, and you are telling me how Macbeth's mental illness drove the plot.
ReplyDeleteAssuming the prompt was different, this thesis still is not too powerful. It is generally accepted that if MacB and Lady Mac were not insane there would be no plot.
Another thing with the intro, your first sentence is also pretty much accepted fact. It sounds like it could be really good, with the Crim Minds reference, but right now it is very bland.
On the other hand, i think the examples and techniques that you give do pretty well supporting your thesis. I especially like what you are saying about Lady mac in both the first and second paragraph, the only problem being that you again do not show what the meaning of Macbeth losing his mind is.
You seem pretty informal in speech in this, and I'm not sure if that is recommended or frowned upon. We should probably ask Ms. Holmes. I do like the "When will he..." question, i think that is a good technique to engage the reader.
"If Macduff hadn’t had his family murdered," this sounds like Macduff was the one who killed his family.
"An exciting sword fight ensued before Macbeth finally fell by Macduff’s sword." This detail seems to have no relevance. We can assume that the reader knows the greater details of the play. In general, i think you have included a bit too much plot summary, instead of focusing on a few core details that serve to drive your point in.
Also, you say that planning murder in cold blood was not accepted in that day and era. Pretty sure it's not accepted in this one either. Unless you mean that it is a woman planning murder, but you still don't give meaning to this anomaly.
So, big things: Read Prompt, Answer Prompt. Good Details. Thought Provoking Thesis. No Unnecessary Plot.
This is a nicely organized essay that flows well and has a very clear beginning, middle, and end. You use lots of details to prove your point that Macbeth and Lady Macbeth are not sane. However, given the prompt, it seems like you should identify specific techniques (DIDLS) that the author uses, and show how those techniques create a "sense of excitement, suspense, and climax usually associated with external events." You should use the effects that the author creates to support your claim of what the overall meaning is. Your essay fits with your thesis, but your thesis does not fully answer the prompt. I know we wrote these essays before learning how to analyze prompts and craft a thesis, so it's understandable that your essay doesn't quite answer the prompt (I know mine did not). Aside from issues with the prompt, though, it's a well written essay with lots of clear details!
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